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The number of people working online from home has grown in some countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays, it is possible for
workers
 to
work
 online without having to go to the office. Some people focus on the drawbacks of working online
such
 as productivity and communication difficulties whereas some others focus on the benefits
such
 as
time
 saved and comfortness.
This
 essay will write about both of the sides of ideas. One of the reasons why working online is an ideal way of working is that a lot of
time
 to prepare and move is saved.
Instead
 of spending hours changing or going to the office,
workers
 can spend their
time
 freely.
This
 can either increase
work
time
 or let the
workers
 start working more relaxed.
Also
,
the
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workers
 can
work
 more comfortably. Without other
workers
 disturbing them, they are able to
work
 more relaxed. Their own room is more than working in the office because their room is perfectly suited for them as well. Most of the
time
, comfortness brings positive effects.
However
, there are still some negative sides
of
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 working online.
For example
, it is harder to interact with people online
then
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Although
 texting,
mailing
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 and calling
is
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 possible, being face to face is still more efficient. Lack of interaction is very likely to cause difficulties in working. The other problem is that people might be less productive without anyone monitoring their
work
. Some
workers
 do not exactly know what to do and some cannot fully concentrate on
work
 without any control. These result in less productivity which is of course bad. There are many advantages of working online but
also
 many unignorable disadvantages. There isn’t much choice during these days but employers should carefully decide what’s best for the specific business they are running.
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