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A responsible tourist could preserve both the local culture and environment. Some people think it is impossible to be a responsible tourist. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, there are a lot of controversies regarding the possibility of
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local cultural and environmental protection by travellers due to the increasing number of
tourists
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. Some people argue that being a responsible tourist is impossible and another thinks that travellers would be able to preserve both the local culture and
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. Regarding
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 issue, I agree with the idea of the possibility which visitors could maintain the local conditions without any damages.
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 with, assuming that the current society is exposed to global information through the internet, it enables
tourists
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 to be easily aware of foreign cultures and their regulations.
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 allows travellers to be responsible
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 the local culture and
environment
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 of foreign countries.
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,
tourists
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 tend to travel for their enjoyment which means
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 natural for visitors to appreciate the
environment
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 they are travelling in. It is possible for
tourists
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 to respect both the local culture and
environment
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.
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, some people believe that
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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