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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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These days, there has been a heated argument about
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high salaries of famous spots trainers. Some people believe
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 acceptable and fair for them while there are others who do not think that. From my own point of view,
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 think it is dependant on the person role at his community.  On the one hand, there is no doubt that sports players have a great role and responsibility in the community
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and the money that they are received most of the time acceptable . To clarify, the famous players have been an important impact on the children as a role model for them .
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, they encourage youngsters to eat healthy food and practice a regular exercise which will lead to improving their fitness, health and even their minds. 
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they are facing a lot of risks . So they have deserved too much money.
On the other hand
, the rare profession
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 should not be neglected and they should earn a high salary.
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, the unique medicine field
such
 as genetic,radiation ,and medical field, in general, should be earning an excellent salary because they are exposed for a lot of viruses, they are in the frontline against any pandemic.
As a result
, the quality of life for all of us will be improved,which is essential for everyone .   To sum up, after analysing both sides of arguments it is no hard to see that a balance should be achieved to ensure fairness remain available to all of us.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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