The number of people suffering from the health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people believe that alternative medicine can help. Do you agree that alternative medicines are effective?

It is argued that the increasing number of patients in the hospitals could be treated with modern medicines ,
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a number of individuals think that
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alternative medicines could help . It is agreed the fact that the acupuncture as well as the other technics used to improve the general health , demonstrated positive results over time .
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To begin
with , some persons suffering from a long term health problem, realise that the treatment followed for a long period of time is not responding anymore ,
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the alternative medicines could be a solution to be considered .
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, a private clinic in London which is specialised in alternative treatment
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as chiropractic therapy
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is confirming the fact that more than 80
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of their service users
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are finding that the pain killers are not effective anymore . The therapies mentioned are in many cases the only and
last
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the modern medication is not as effective anymore . To continue , the
chinesse
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Chinese
technics approach could
also
present extended results for the suffering person . In some cases
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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