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Some people think it is better for children to grow up in the city, others think that life in the countryside is who is more suitable. Advantages and disadvantages of both places.

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Some people have the opinion that
children
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 should be grown up in urban
areas
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 while others argue that rural
areas
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 are better for young ones. There are both merits and demerits of both places.
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, there are plenty of benefits and facilities available for
children
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 who are brought up in the
cities
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. A number of high standard schools and education institutes are available in the urban
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, and the kids can get better education while living in the
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.
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, there are lots of
parks
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 and public places are available in the
cities
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 which are quite fascinating for the kids, and they enjoy them a lot.
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, in the city of Islamabad there are 5 public
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 that contain a large number of playgrounds, playing equipment, and fountains available for the
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, and on average 500 kids visiting these
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 on the weekends, and enjoy their leisure time. In the contrast, the young one who is living in the countryside lacks these facilities. They do not have any
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 and the standard of the educational institutes in the rural
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 are not up to the mark.
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 there are some issues in the countryside
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, there are other aspects which are considered as advantages of rural
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. The atmosphere of those
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 are quite better because these
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 are far away from the dangerous smokes of the vehicles, and waste materials of the industrial
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 which devastate the environment, and bad for the health of young ones.
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,
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 who are living in rural
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 eat fresh food and vegetables which are cultivated in their own lands and farms.
On the other hand
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, young one living in the towns do not have access to fresh foods as well as the environment of the
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 are quite polluted.
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,
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 living in rural
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 are healthier as compared to the young ones living in urban
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. To conclude, I would like to reinstate that there are numerous advantages and drawbacks of bringing up
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 in the
cities
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 as well as in the rural
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.
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