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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
It is stated that communities from elite as well as low-class
people
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 bear difficulties when seeking higher
education
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.
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, I consider that the problem of accessing higher studies is only for poor
people
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 with financial issues and lack of
resources
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 whereas, the high-class have immense
resources
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 as well as
money
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 that they can afford it. In
further
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, I will explain the causes in an extended way that why accessing
education
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 is the only difficulty for financially unstable
people
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.
Body paragraph 1
I firmly believe that anything can be bought with
money
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 and other
resources
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, even higher studies. It is easy for a child of company C.E.O. to get access to anything because of his dad
money
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 and high profile contacts. Even if a student is not having really good grades still, he will manage to get admitted to a university.
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, there is a doctor whose child is not possessing enough grades to meet the eligibility criteria,
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 he will give
money
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 in millions to make him a doctor privately.
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 is how the
one
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 having enough
money
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 or is financially stable can easily get access to higher
education
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.
Body paragraph 2
An Elite class can be sometimes a big hurdle in front of poor
people
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's success. In our daily life, we can see various cases where a poor in abused by a rich or there is no
one
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 to get up for a poor because everyone is blindfolded by the
money
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 of rich.
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, it can be seen in the army test, where there are two pupils for the same seat,
one
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 is hard-working but from a poor background and other is normal in comparison to the
first
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one
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 but he is the son of an army officer.
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, the candidate with army background will get the position even if his points are little less than the
one
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 with a poor background.
Conclusion
In conclusion to above, there is a debate that both the elite and poor class
people
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 get difficulties in accessing higher
education
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. I firmly believe that
this
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 problem in seeking higher
education
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 is only for the poor with a lack of finances and
resources
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.
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, the rich can easily get them admitted in any institute that provides higher
education
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 by giving double fees or by offering a bribe to the institutes.

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