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Nowadays for many people the Internet is replacing regular books. What do you think will happen in the future and what is your opinion about this trend?

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In modern
life
, the
internet
 is (the) one of a huge and valuable source of
information
 and replacing
books
 for
second
 place and vanishing in future it question of time. I guess, for modern
people
this
 fact can help to reduce deforestation and pollution and help to find some
information
 easily than in the previous century.
Firstly
, the process of producing
books
 very expensive and spend many resources on producing. The
life
 cycle of a book to short and it can be spoiled so fast but if we use laptop or e-book we can get new
information
 without any problem. If we need some book we can buy it on the
internet
 and have in our storage in a device it will help to reduce deforestation and make less pollution that the process of production of
books
 has. As the
last
 statistic said that 25% of deforestation in the period 1970-2000 was connected with producing
books
.
Secondly
, in modern
life
, we got needs to find some
information
 quickly as possible and
internet
 sources might be a good alternative to
books
. We can read very rare
books
 on the screen of our computers without any problems or necessary to meet library. The
internet
 help for
people
 be in touch with a huge amount of
information
 and
this
information
 fill volume of your device and you can use it at any time or place without problems. As google statistic said, searching request on the
internet
 of electronic libraries increased
last
 year at 40% than before. In conclusion, I want to say that, the
internet
 is more convenient than
books
 and all
this
 process is natural because the evolution of
people
 and high level of technologies dictate a new rule of
life
. But
books
 might be a good gift for
people
 who
likes
Change the verb form
like
show examples
 to collect
it
Change the pronoun
them
show examples
.
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