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Some people believe that preserving natural environment is crucial, however, most make no effort to do so. Why do you think this is happening? What are some simple actions that could help the environment?

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We as living beings depend upon the
environment
 in a lot of ways
such
 as air, water etcetera.
Environment
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 is vital for our existence. Pollution is damaging the
environment
. Many
people
 are reporting diseases due to pollution. Yet
people
 are not making an effort to preserve it.
This
 essay will discuss the causes behind it and the steps that can be undertaken to preserve the
environment
.
First
 and foremost, numerous
people
 whether educated or uneducated are not aware of the consequences of harming the surroundings.
Secondly
, individuals believe that it is the primary responsibility of the government to take care of the natural resources and the
environment
 and have a casual attitude towards the crucial problem. Several steps can be taken to preserve the
environment
. The administration should make it compulsory for schools to teach subjects on social and economic causes and make children understand that it is the responsibility of individuals and efforts should be made to reduce the carbon footprints and drives
such
 as back to nature, tree plantation should be launched.
In addition
, efforts should be made to reduce the use of plastics.
Furthermore
, fewer chemicals should be used to conserve the water.
Moreover
, the administration should place educational posters and hoardings for
people
 to remind the ill-effects of damaging the
environment
.
Also
, segregating
the
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waste can
also
 be helpful in order to promote recycling. To sum up, the governments all over the world are making efforts to protect and preserve our mother earth and they need co-operation from individuals as well so that we can help achieve our goal of maintaining a healthy ecosystem.
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