An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

Nowadays, it is quite common that qualified individuals are looking for a greener pasture in
well developed
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countries.
This
essay
will discuss the main cause of why
professionals
prefer to look for their future outside their
country
including poor
work
systems in their
country
.
This
essay
will
also
suggest the main solution on what step should
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overnment needed to do to keep their
professionals
to stay in the
country
To start with,
professionals
such
as doctors and teachers choose to
work
abroad in order for them to earn good money. One of the reasons for these problems that they are facing right now
are
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the poor
work
systems in their own
country
.
For instance
, in the Philippines nurses and doctors would choose to
work
overseas as they are well-paid and their jobs are well appreciated by the people compared back home.
In addition
, working abroad will give a better future for themselves or for their own families.
Therefore
, qualified workers are flying abroad as developed countries give them opportunities to use and share their professions.
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officials from the government can influence
professionals
to stop them from leaving their own
country
. I think if governments will offer
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better pay for those
professionals
they would highly likely
would
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stay and do their service in the
country
they grew up with.
For example
,
instead
of using the
professionals
for working as a volunteer just to gain
work
experience, I would suggest private or public companies and governments should offer a salary to sustain the lifestyle of the person. That being the case,
professionals
such
as doctors and nurses will stay and will be more motivated to
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their passion
towards
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work
. To sum it up,
professionals
' intentions to
work
in
first
world countries are increasingly common these days.
This
essay
discussed the reason why
professionals
leave their
country
and look for green pastures abroad.
This
essay
also
suggested that the solution to
this
problem is for the governments to offer more opportunity to their own
professionals
such
as better wages for them to support their self and family.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled professionals
  • Healthcare systems
  • Education systems
  • Economic growth
  • Dependency on foreign aid
  • Social inequality
  • Quality healthcare
  • Quality education
  • Retain talent
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable growth
  • Scholarships
  • Professional development
  • Remote work capabilities
  • Local research funding
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