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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

#professionals #doctors #teachers #countries #work #situation
Nowadays, it is quite common that qualified individuals are looking for a greener pasture in
well developed
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 countries.
This
essay
 will discuss the main cause of why
professionals
 prefer to look for their future outside their
country
 including poor
work
 systems in their
country
.
This
essay
 will
also
 suggest the main solution on what step should
g
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overnment needed to do to keep their
professionals
 to stay in the
country
 To start with,
professionals
such
 as doctors and teachers choose to
work
 abroad in order for them to earn good money. One of the reasons for these problems that they are facing right now
are
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 the poor
work
 systems in their own
country
.
For instance
, in the Philippines nurses and doctors would choose to
work
 overseas as they are well-paid and their jobs are well appreciated by the people compared back home.
In addition
, working abroad will give a better future for themselves or for their own families.
Therefore
, qualified workers are flying abroad as developed countries give them opportunities to use and share their professions.
High rank
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 officials from the government can influence
professionals
 to stop them from leaving their own
country
. I think if governments will offer
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better pay for those
professionals
 they would highly likely
would
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stay and do their service in the
country
 they grew up with.
For example
,
instead
 of using the
professionals
 for working as a volunteer just to gain
work
 experience, I would suggest private or public companies and governments should offer a salary to sustain the lifestyle of the person. That being the case,
professionals
such
 as doctors and nurses will stay and will be more motivated to
fulfill
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 their passion
towards
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work
. To sum it up,
professionals
' intentions to
work
 in
first
 world countries are increasingly common these days.
This
essay
 discussed the reason why
professionals
 leave their
country
 and look for green pastures abroad.
This
essay
also
 suggested that the solution to
this
 problem is for the governments to offer more opportunity to their own
professionals
such
 as better wages for them to support their self and family.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled professionals
  • Healthcare systems
  • Education systems
  • Economic growth
  • Dependency on foreign aid
  • Social inequality
  • Quality healthcare
  • Quality education
  • Retain talent
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable growth
  • Scholarships
  • Professional development
  • Remote work capabilities
  • Local research funding
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