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In the past most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

#people #villages #cities #area #community
The
places
 where
people
 live affect greatly their lifestyles and the living
place
 is one of the very basic needs for
people
.
People
 opine differently while choosing living
places
. Some prefer and argue that the
city
 is the best
place
 to live since it provides so many advantages over the rural area, but others think that villages are the best
places
 to live a good life. Both
places
 have advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, it is clear that moving to a peaceful rural retreat can bring you many more advantages that far outweigh in a big
city
.
First
 of all, with a small community, it is easier for police to control the number of criminals while the inner
city
 which is plenty of inhabitants can be the main cause of the crime rate because of its living conditions.
For instance
, when we live in a small village the burglar cannot easily break into our house without being recognized by a villager.
Secondly
, there is fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere for
city
 dwellers who desire to live a slower pace of life and closer to nature.
This
 may be the best way for them to downshift to a less stressful life.
On the other hand
, a village may have lots of profits but there are some against can be considered.
First
 and foremost, many
people
 start to leave their hometown and move to the
city
 which has adequate employment opportunities. Another aspect is that lack of transport makes travel from
place
 to
place
 in an isolated area seem to be more difficult than most large cities especially with lazy
people
 who hate
traveling
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 on their foot. At
last
, keeping all the aspects in mind, we can conclude that living in any part has both benefits and drawbacks,
however
, it’s a great choice to live in rural when we get old
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sense of community
  • Bond
  • Close-knit
  • Tight-knit
  • Belonging
  • Familiarity
  • Security
  • Support system
  • Social connections
  • Look out for
  • Have someone's back
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