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Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that ex-prisoners can become normal, productive members of society. Some
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angers of committing a crime. From my perspective, I completely agree that those
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 for the purpose of discouraging them from breaking the law. On the one hand,
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 are more likely to accept advice from someone who can speak from experience. Reformed offenders can tell young
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 about how they involved in crime, the dangers of
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riminal lifestyle, and what life in prison is really like. While
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 are often indifferent to the guidance given by older
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tudents are keen to hear the stories of an ex-offender. The vivid and shocking nature of these stories is likely to have a powerful impact.
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alternative methods to guide adolescents are less effective. One option would be for officers
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chool and discuss with
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peak to their
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 about crime, but effectiveness is doubted as
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 might not see teachers as a credible source of information.
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 to interact. In conclusion, I fully agree that ex-prisoners should talk to
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 since it is the most effective and efficient way to deter
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 from committing crimes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prisoners
  • rehabilitation
  • recidivism
  • consequences
  • insights
  • deterrent
  • guidance
  • support
  • role models
  • positive change
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