Some people think that schools should give prizes for academic successes. Others argue that it is more important for schools to give prizes for other achievements (for example, for sports, music and behavior). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Since schools are founded, there has been a long history of scholarships. Some people reckon that

students

with excellent academic grades can gain prizes, while others claim that awards on other kinds of achievements,

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as sports and music are more crucial. In

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essay, I will discuss the above views and draw a conclusion on why I believe all categories of accomplishments are equally important and should be prized. On the one hand, there is no doubt that

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academic success should be awarded

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because it can give incentives to

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reater extent of efforts. People who have the same views may argue that remarkable academic performances are achieved by

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ndustrial endeavour, and if

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’ efforts were recognised, it would bring them a sense of achievement, which is beneficial for the future study and increase their interests on learning.

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, the attainment can

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set a goal for other

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as they are more likely to work harder for

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recognition.

On the other hand

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ewarding student who

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excellent in arts or

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balance our educational system. As we all know,

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individuals are much more competitive than those who are only good at their subject theories. After all, we need diverse talents to work together to build up our world. If the education sectors only

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pupils for the academic reason, those who are poor in academic but good at sports or arts may lose their motivation to work hard.

As a result

, we may miss

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group of talents. In conclusion, in the press world, people can not simply

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udged by their academic successes, and other aspects are

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the key factors. I believe that all kinds of attainments are equally significant

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because comprehensive development is more welcomed in

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society and benefits

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in different ways.