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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

#countries #people #products #world #development
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 a major role in every
country
 around the world.
However
, some
people
 say that there is a positive because it helps in
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ountry's development. I disagree with the claim, and in
this
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To begin
 with, in my view if a
product
 is being manufactured, developed and maintained in
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ative
country
,
then
 its relatively cheaper for the local's to buy. Whereas, if the
producted
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product
produced
 is exported to
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eighbour
country
 it would be expensive because, the consumer would be charged for import
tax
, and
luxary
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luxury
tax
, and the registration of the
product
 that would increase the price
furthurmore
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furthermore
.
For Example
, in Australia
people
 usually pay
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ax of 13
percent
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 on the
product
 for their purchase, now
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let's
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 suppose if they had to import a car for another
country
 and they had to pay 13% more
tax
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because
 they are bringing a
froigen
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foreign
product
in to
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 the
country
.
Moreover
, if
people
 by the
product
 the
signifance
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significance
 of the
product
 would be increased and
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would be
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hugh
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huge
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 unnecessary for the
product
, which would result in
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omplete waste of money. In a nutshell, on what's discussed
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 the above essay. I clearly say that it would be
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egative development because the native products that are made would
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 their value in the market.
Instead
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,
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this
 economic crisis
people
 should be
enopuraged
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encouraged
 to buy local products and they could be offered discount or incentives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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