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Some people believe that money is the best gift for teenagers while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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To begin
 with, it is important to mention that gifts given by parents for their children changes with their age. I believe it is much easier to buy a present for toddlers. If it comes to teenagers situation might be much more complicated. Their interests, preferences and hobbies changes at the speed of light,
therefore
 it might be difficult to catch up and give a suitable gift. It is known that people often look for the easier way of solving the problem. Giving cash
instead
 of buying something fancy is one of them. On the one hand,it is beneficial for both sides.
Firstly
, the giver did not have to look for a suitable present and worry if it fits.
Secondly
, the recipient is able to spend
this
money
 in a way they want and get what they really desired.
Moreover
,
money
 is extremely important for teenagers.
This
 is an age of searching for passions, hobbies, taking
an
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extra lessons while preparing for exams or spending time outside with friends. For all of those activities
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they need finances.
Besides
, youth is
also
 a time of rebellion and exploring the inner self. Getting a mismatched gift may only provoke and ruin a day.
That is
 why
money
 might be the best solution.
On the other hand
, personalised presents are significant and more memorable. They stay in mind for a long time.
However
, it would be great if they came from close relatives
,
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 because they now their recipient the best.
Furthermore
, if a teenager talks openly about what they and give
money
 in return, it might be hurtful.
That is
 why it is highly important to listen
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other people and find what they really enjoy and want to receive. To sum up, I believe it is hard to agree or disagree on
this
 topic. The main point is to listen to others needs. If they prefer to get
money
 as a gift,
then
 go for it.
However
, If they desire to get something more personalised, why not to give them that.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • budget
  • save
  • informed spending decisions
  • personal preferences
  • practical and efficient
  • unwanted or inappropriate gifts
  • impersonal
  • emotional value
  • thoughtfulness
  • personal consideration
  • wise financial decisions
  • frivolously
  • lasting memories and experiences
  • educational courses
  • hobby-related equipment
  • long-lasting positive impact
  • fostering interests and skills
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