More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree?

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last
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there has been a noticeable shift towards a lifestyle that resulted in numerous health problems. Unfortunately, these conditions cannot be treated by the means of modern
medicine
, so it is believed by some that only traditional
medicine
could help tackle
this
issue. Personally, I do not subscribe to
this
point of view, as
this
kind of
medicine
not only lacks the proof of its effectiveness
,
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but
also
poses
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ertain threat to those making use of it.
Firstly
, there is little scientific evidence that traditional
medicine
could effectively target the diseases related to a contemporary lifestyle. Scientific methods of our time depend heavily on thorough research, and it is immature to take ancient
medicine
-related ideas for granted.
For instance
, some Russian people claim that obesity could be cured by drinking parsley juice,
although
there is no evidence that
such
herbal
medicine
has any effect on body fat (unless parsley is the sole component of one’s diet).
Therefore
, since traditional
medicine
is not backed up by scientific data, its positive effect could not be guaranteed as opposed to conventional
medicine
.
Secondly
, those
practicing
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traditional
medicine
tend to ignore its possible dangers, especially when it comes to treating conditions that are considered
uncurable
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.
This
sometimes leads to additional health problems and might even pose threat to life.
For example
, people in Scandic countries use poisonous mushrooms for stress management, yet there have been reported cases of permanent brain damage due to these practices.
Thus
, without proper knowledge patients could get more harm from traditional
medicine
rather than
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enefit. To sum up, traditional
medicine
is considered neither effective nor safe by modern science.
Although
recent changes in lifestyle are believed to be the cause of certain untreatable health problems, I see no point in relying on traditional
medicine
. In my opinion, it would be better if society invested more resources in medical research
instead
in order to address these issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • chronic conditions
  • holistic approach
  • preventive care
  • natural remedies
  • cultural heritage
  • ancestral knowledge
  • integration
  • complementary healthcare
  • regulation
  • standardization
  • scientific validation
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