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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved?

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These past few decades have seen a surge in health issues that are directly linked with eating disorder. It is widely known that transitioning from a bad eating habit into a healthier one is certainly a path full of hardships. The main causes of
this
 phenomenon as well as possible alternatives will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, it is important to explore the main reasons behind
this
 struggle. One of them is the fact that unhealthier foods normally are tastier than is counterparts. Our brains have been wired over thousands of years to find
fat rich
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 meals tastier because they provide energy for longer periods of time
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 as if the body was preparing for times when
food
 is scarcer. Convenience is another factor that plays an important role nowadays. There are fast
food
 establishments in every corner as well as delivery mobile applications that facilitate our lives when in comparison to having to cook our own meal, and most of them focus on
food
 with poor nutritional value.
Although
 these issues might seem challenging to overcome, solutions can certainly be found.
Nutrionists
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Nutritionists
 are professionals that not only know about the nutritional contents of meals, but they can help to develop a menu of
food
that is
 not only healthy but tasty as well.
In addition
 to that, it is possible to use the convenience of mobile applications to order healthy
food
.
Also
, several new healthy fast-
food
 chains have been expanding and offering delivery alternatives as well, so there is no more excuse to order salty and
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 meals only. The topic discussed here is definitely complex. Each person's case is unique and should be explored by an expert in the field
such
 as a doctor. In spite of that, the arguments presented above paint a clear picture that it is certainly possible to overcome
this
 bad eating habit.
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