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Although more and more people read the news on the internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of the news for the majority of people. How far do you agree or disagree?

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"Newspaper" is the idle and best source of information provider around the world
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, we should be
greatful
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grateful
 for the traditional way of spreading
news
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 through newspapers. Despite,
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 some
people
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 prefer
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nternet over
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ewspaper because it updated in
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ourly manner. I agree with the above claim, and in the following essay
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I will submit my argument in
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support
 of my view. On the one hand, due to rapidly developing technology
every one
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 has an electronic device, which would connect to the
internet
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 and provide the newsfeed at their
finger tips
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fingertips
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, in the prefered language.
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,
lets
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 take an Apple
IPhone
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iPhone
 which has a dedicated
news
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 application that would summon all the
news
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 in an orderly manner along with a live video recording and reactions around the globe.
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 same when compared to the laptop or the desktop computer that out publish the
news
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, while they follow or like the
news
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 channel.
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, in
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today's
today
todays
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 technology
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there are many social messages applications and accounts that would spread the
news
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with in
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within
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 a matter of minutes. On
the
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another hand, when the
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news papers
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newspapers
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 are considered they take
alteast
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least
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12 hours of time to publish the whole
news
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 along with the editorial content, and
in addition
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 to
this
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 newspapers
also
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 have a
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dedicated
 classified page that
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 any
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vacancy
 for a job position or any auction sale.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, more of the elderly
people
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 will prefer newspaper since it's
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 ancient way
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news gathering
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newsgathering
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. In some
under developed
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underdeveloped
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 countries
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most of the population would be
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uneducated
 and they don't even have access to
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nternet, and can only speak in their native language and
people
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 read only what's written in their native language. In a nutshell, based on arguments outlined on the above essay , I clearly agree, that even though most of the
people
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 are using
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nternet ,majority of the
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 use newspapers as the primary source of information provider because its the best way of reading
news
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 in the morning.
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