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Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some would argue that
children
 should always learn through their leisure activities,
otherwise
 their spare time will have no use.
This
 essay agrees with
this
 statement because by playing intellectual
games
,
children
 may develop their concentration skills and may learn how to find solutions to problems.
Children
 should play only educational
games
 because they help them to be more focused. By playing quiz
games
 as well as educational computer
games
, young generation
learn
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 how to be concentrated on
s
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pecific issue and ignore any disturbing factors that may positively influence their
further
 study process.
For example
, a recent Cambridge University survey found that over 60% of
children
 playing educational
games
 are very diligent students.  Another significant factor is that through educational leisure activities
children
 may develop their creativity and abilities to solve problems.
In other words
, by acquiring new knowledge in the game process,
children
 learn how to make up new ideas very quickly and convert them to
promissing
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promising
 solutions. According to acclaimed British journal, the Economist, Japanese
children
,
for instance
, usually spend their leisure activities by playing sudoku and chess that have a beneficial effect on their abilities to find
promissing
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promising
 solutions. In conclusion, it is thought by some that
children
 should spend their spare time with usefulness because educational
games
 are able to develop not only
children
's concentration skills
,
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 but
also
 their creativity and abilities to solve problems.
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