Its advatages or disadvantages: The government bans alcohol consumption?

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It's thought by some people that if the government forbid consumption the
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,we can avoid doing stupid things,the growth of crime would start reducing. But for many people consumption beer or wine are
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reat opportunity to relieve the stress. One evident benefit to restricting
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drinks is that the government can decide
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roblem in different directions. One of these directions is reducing the dangerous destruction of families
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when one of
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arents doesn't find a right decision to find accumulated problems beside he goes to a bar and start to drink, and
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money and deteriorates the situation more.
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TV News,
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mortality has increased and has reached the most higher indicator for
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ast two years. Manufactures will be against any restriction on
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production, as their profits from the sale would decrease and they would lose their money. Manufactures of aluminium and plastic would lose enormous profit. In the other hand, drinking alcoholic beverages is an opportunity by which working people and tourists may relax and take off pressure which accumulated after a hard day. Many medical professions advise using drinks times in a day before
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lunch or dinner In conclusion, different
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articular place in our life, and important to have
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skill to find
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easure in everything and not to go over a certain line.
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