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In many countries, international tourism has become an important source of income. However, it also has negative effects. Do the benefits of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages?

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In many parts of the world, overseas trips account for a significant proportion of their national income.
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, there are
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 concerns about its disadvantages. Personally, I am inclined to the view that the demerits of the growth of global
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 outweigh the advantages.
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 with, the tourist business heavily depends on economic situations and diplomatic relations, so a constant income cannot be assured. We have seen that the
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 of a country has affected when the global economy became slightly worse or the relationship between
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 was damaged.
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, nations who rely on their tourist attractions for earning money cannot deal with the change in situations,
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 as a conflict between
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 or economic recession.
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, the more travellers visit a country, the more difficult it is for it to protect their monuments, cultural assets from tourists.
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, the pyramids in Egypt, which is one of the greatest architectures in the world has been damaged by thoughtless tourists. In contrasts, through the
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 industry, developing
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 where pristine nature is preserved may gain enormous income and provide their citizens with many jobs. Because once
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 attract visitors from foreign
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, there must be an increase in demands for accommodation, restaurants, and transportation. To operate these facilities, manpower is needed, and the public can be provided with the jobs.
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, when holidaymakers spend money on using them in the country, a foundation of
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 development for the nations where financial resources to industrialise themselves are yet insufficient. In conclusion, there are some advantages and demerits of global
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.
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, I think the disadvantages of it outweigh the merits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Revenue
  • Accommodation
  • Cultural exchange
  • Infrastructure
  • Pollution
  • Erosion
  • Overcrowding
  • Economic dependency
  • Global events
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Mutual understanding
  • Strain on natural resources
  • Foot traffic
  • Local traditions and customs
  • Cultural awareness
  • Vulnerable
  • Pandemics
  • Political instability
  • Residue
  • Host country
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