The use of social media, such as Facebook and Twitter, is replacing face-to-face contact with many people. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

The vast majority of humans today use social
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meetings.
Furthermore
, they replaced bars, restaurants and parks which were general platforms for communication for people 20-30 years ago. From my point of view, these changes are inevitable, right now we must pay more attention to
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sage of our private data inside of these modern
media
giants and their security,
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these applications and websites help us to stay in touch with our relatives and friends remotely, and
this
benefit is overweighting any disadvantages. On the one hand, without IT companies and their product, we wouldn’t be able to communicate with various people around the globe.
Furthermore
, if they didn’t create these platforms, we would live totally diverse and not as rapid lives.
For instance
, previously if you hadn’t met a person in real life, for you even to find out how he or she looks, you would have to wait for a letter with portraits and it would take a long time to figure out the interlocutor’s appearance. From my point of view, if somebody has survived without social
media
until now, he must have been living in the jungle with wild wolves or he is an ordinary retiree.
On the other hand
, if our personal interests and preferences are property of IT corporations they could use it
however
they wish.
Moreover
, we must care about it, because our data is the most expensive product on the market and that’s why protection of it is an important business.
For example
, if you were using the same password for your bank account,
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and on your school
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forum and hackers hijacked your parole once, they would have access for a bunch of resources. Generally, double authentication or diverse passwords could help you to avoid troubles like these, but if there were some sort of leakage from
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atabase that’s an area of IT companies responsibility. To conclude, without social
media
our world would be more divided, parents would have no opportunity to communicate with their kids abroad, friendships would be over after someone's job offer from abroad. To be honest,
this
risk of cyber attacks on different services only supports us to improve the security of our data, and I’m sure that IT giants grow their protection faster than hackers finding breaches in it.
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