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When you learn a foreign language, all four skills (listening, reading, speaking, and writing) are equally important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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tudent in different overseas
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. Overall, it is evident that
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 The number of female students
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 more skilled on using foreign
languages
 as compared to male in all countries except in
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Thailand
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, there was relatively more proportion of
males
 who knew the other
languages
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ighest percentage of knowledge on it which was least in China. To embark with, Romanian and Indian girls were more
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cognizant
cognisant
 about foreign
languages
 where approximately 65% of them could speak other
languages
, while it was about 55
%
in Vietnams.
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, slightly more than 40% of girls from Russia were able to use it which was about 15% lesser in China and around 20% lesser in Thailand. OOn the other hand,
males
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oreign language as only about 15% of Chinese boys could speak it. Which was approximately double among the Thai
males
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 Russian and Vietnamese witnessed
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 similar proportion of about 35%. Meanwhile, it was slightly more among Romanian boys
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 40% and even more in India where
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ighest proportion of about 55% of
males
 could communicate in various
languages
 other than their native language.
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