The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

Today global
population
have been rapidly as well as
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increasing since
last
century and it’s become
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atal obstacle for every nation of the world.
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population
has been created
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isturbance and panic situation among the community. In
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well as its issues. Global
population
has increased considerably may be due to several causes. To commence with, increased life expectancy in the twenty-
first
century allows
people
nowadays to live longer.
This
may be mainly due to the advanced technology used in medical fields which are able to cure and prevent the diseases that are previously untreatable.
In addition
,
people
these days are more educated and
health conscious
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so they spend more money on it with the various instruments.
For instance
, in developed countries
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almost all
people
have various kind of health insurance to secure their health without any financial problems so today many couples have more than 2 or 3 children’s even they are very well educated.
Moreover
, medical insurance and free healthcare facility
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provided security in terms of social as well as financial prospects.
Global
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population
is the biggest problem for mankind. Majority of
people
have lived in
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third
world countries where they have been suffering troubles like poverty and unemployment. There may be no sufficient resources to meet their demand so various crimes are increasing in
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society.
Moreover
, our mother nature has limited resources to accomplish and fulfils today
people
’s demand so It creates unfaith towards official’s system that cause
people
live under the fear and insecurity and in the end, it will turn into the blood war, antisocial activities and various riots. In conclusion, the increase the global
population
is caused by numerous
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problem
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such
as
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to achieve basics requirements of life and it leads towards the dark and danger.
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