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Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Now with the advancement of
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 people are able to monitor with their action and words so many believe that it has drawbacks. Today, people use lots of smart devices in their
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 for routine
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, leisure
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 as well as social purpose.
Technology
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 has pros and cons.
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, I support the positive side of
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technology
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 because it has many benefits. To commence with, there
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 ample reason to support my view.
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, it is very helpful to reduce, control and solving various criminal and antisocial
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.
Technology
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 can reach every corner of the world so it will solve numerous problems. In
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most of
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remises have been install CCTV camera due to monitor and reduce any suspicious
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, police can solve any criminal case and find the criminal with
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 and stop
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amage of any property as well as lives
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,
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 helps to increase
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roductivity of the company. When workers know that they have been observed on camera they involve in their
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 only rather than doing any unnecessary things.
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iamond industry most of the
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 do by their employees only so as much as
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mployee are engaged with their
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, they will get more production and workers get more rewards.
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 is breaking our privacy.it
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 responsible for many crimes. Some anti-social elements do lots of criminal
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 as kidnapping, theft and blackmail.
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, many misuse technologies to earn money and just for fun.
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, they leak private photos, chats and videos.
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, it can solve by few steps of precaution as well as self-awareness. To conclude, the
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 of
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 makes our
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 comfortable and convenient without its
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 almost impossible but it is
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 the solid medium of track our personal
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