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Band 7.5

You are planning a holiday in another country and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to the friend asking him/her to join you and explain: - Why are you taking a holiday? - What is your holiday plan? - Why would you like him/her to go with you?

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Hi Susan, How are you going? I wanna tell you that I have a plan to go to Bangkok next month. And, I want you to join me for that trip as I know that you'll be free at that time. As I told you, I'm taking a holiday because I've been completing the First Year Engineering course at the moment. It's certain that you will
also
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 be tired of studying a lot, and might need to take a break as soon as possible. So, I'm arranging
this
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 pleasant trip for us to have fun together.
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 with, we are gotta book a flight with cheap fares to avoid the seasonal demands. I suggest booking two-way tickets from Air Asia airline via Agoda.com. It might cost only $140 per pax. And, we can buy extra kilos at the booking time. After that, we'll reserve online for accommodation at a two or three-star hotel within the downtown area. I want to select Marwin Villa, which is located in Phetchaburi Soi 15, to stay five nights. The payment will be $100 in total, and it is worth of value. As you are my best friend and we are in the same boat, just make sure to accompany me. I'll be hoping much from your reply. With love, Swe Zin Moe

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but some ideas are not fully clear. Say more about why this trip is good for your friend.
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Task response: Use a more natural letter tone. "I wanna" and "we are gotta" are not good for this test. Use "I want to" and "we should".
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear order: trip, reason, plan, and friend. This is good.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some link words are not used well. Keep sentences short and easy. This will help your ideas flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put one main idea in one paragraph. Your plan paragraph can be split into flight and hotel.
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Task response: You cover all three bullet points.
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Task response: You give real details about the trip, like flight, hotel, time, and cost.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Most paragraphs have one main focus.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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