Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.
It is said that
,
when you want to feel alive Remove the comma
apply
then
travel, and when you want to learn survival experience a
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apply
city
life. In this
age, where majority
of the people are working, they prefer to stay near their respective Add an article
the majority
a majority
workplace
either by renting an apartment or by buying a house nearby. Fix the agreement mistake
workplaces
Although
, this
decision is helpful considering many things quality of education, job requirement
etc., Fix the agreement mistake
requirements
but
when it comes to facilities and quality of life many folks agree how it has deteriorated. In Correct word choice
apply
this
essay, we will discuss the probable causes and possible soultions
for the same.
To start with, one of the major reasons for Correct your spelling
solutions
such
degradation is due to
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the high-level
high-level
of Correct your spelling
high level
pollution
, whether it is the society folks are living in or the nearby places. And this
includes,
air Remove the comma
apply
pollution
due to
traffic, water
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and water
pollution
due to
poor waste treatment. Secondly
, the amenities which previously the places used to offer, such
as quiet cafes, gardens
which can be utilized for different purposes example: yoga, walking or meditation, everywhere Correct word choice
and gardens
its
overcrowded or hardly there are any places to visit. Correct your spelling
is
For example
, in a
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the
city
of Bangalore due to
high traffic people usually prefer staying in than even try
to get out because they will be stuck in a jam for hours. Wrong verb form
trying
Hence
these people usually prefer spending time outside the city
. Lastly
, increase
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the increase
of
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in
fraudlent
landlords, Correct your spelling
fraudulent
this
is one of the major reasons which scares many younger men and women to stay in Correct pronoun usage
apply
a
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apply
city rented
apartments, as these owners harass them in every possible way.
Add a hyphen
city-rented
On the other hand
, when it comes to help
reduce Change the verb form
helping
such
probable causes, government
can take many actions to decrease Add an article
the government
such
issues. Firstly
, strict rules to be applied if men and women are stuck in traffic such
as switch
off Wrong verb form
switching
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their vehicle
vehicle
, so that neither they create Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
pollution
on
Change preposition
in
air
or noise to the ears of Correct article usage
the air
general
public. Add an article
the general
Secondly
, build more parks with more arrangements, public
is paying taxes that money should be utilized for their need. Add an article
the public
Finally
, take severe actions against society heads and landlords who harasses
tenants by asking for more money or make fraudulent promises to give amenities and Change the verb form
harass
then
don't. For instance
, in a city
like Bangalore
many younger professionals after facing Add a comma
Bangalore,
such
issues have created an app where they can report Correct determiner usage
the
these injustice
which Change the determiner
this injustice
these injustices
happend
to them. And these problems can be reported to Correct your spelling
happened
nearby
police station which can help these new tenants. Add an article
the nearby
Thus
, if everyone works together we can definitely reach an adjustment.
In conclusion, with all the tech-hubs
or jobs around the world, Correct your spelling
tech hubs
its
the cities which provide these survival opportunities for everyone whether Replace the word
it's
it is
its
a student or an experienced professional. Though there are many issues which Correct your spelling
it's
has
led to the degradation of Change the verb form
have
usual
lavish life, Correct article usage
the usual
but
we can for sure overcome it with all the Remove the conjunction
apply
needful
steps.Correct word choice
necessary
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