Many people believe that companies and individuals should pay to clean up the environment in proportion to the amount of pollution they have produced? Do you agree or disagree?

Pollution is a very discussed subject at the moment ,
thus
some individuals believe that the organisations and people who produce it , should be
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financially
responsible for the damage produced towards the environment .
Therefore
considering the negative effect produced , I support the idea that the cleaning task should be delegated to the people that are involved .
To begin
with , the continuing pollution of the planet negatively impacts the global changes as well
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humans lives . The
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climate
change is one of the most affected by the air
poluttion
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pollution
and these changes
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to be difficult to be reversed .
For instance
, the glaciers in Antarctica could present the highest level of danger for the population if they continue to
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disappear
, as well as the extinction of Arctic animals which are able to exist only in certain conditions . Thinking of health issues
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should be considered the fact that at the present moment more than 60
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of the young generation suffers
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breathing difficulties
such
as asthma and
this
could increase in the future years if no action is displayed . After all , awareness should be raised to avoid
further
negative consequences . To continue , the
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beneficial
outcomes of
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roposal could be that a high number of the companies and individuals would consider the reduction of
machineries
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or habits which lead to
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mass pollution . Reflecting their damaging behaviour into the bills submitted would clearly
financialy
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financially
disturb them . Another benefit
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would be the ongoing care for the environment which eventually would contribute to the well being of the world .
Furthermore
, applying taxes for the negative actions would create a cleaner space and
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health issues would occur . In conclusion, I agree that the companies and persons who are polluting the air by their nature of work should be financially responsible .
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