In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, which is important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many people consider working early and getting paid important for a
child
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because they can accumulate valuable experience while others oppose it and believe that it is not right to let a
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work
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at an early age. From my point of view, I am more convinced by the latter. On the one hand, many people argue that some kind of paid
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can be beneficial for
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for several reasons.
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, studying at school is usually theoretical, which means that it may not be helpful enough for schoolchildren to have a deep understanding
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what they have been taught. By starting to
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, they are believed to acquire more practical knowledge , which is more necessary and plays a vital role in shaping a
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’s perception.
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, being engaged in jobs that have
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alary can be a good way to teach
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about responsibilities. To be more specific, to earn money, they have to
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hard and meet the requirements of the workplace; making them realise that, if they do not complete or are irresponsible for given tasks, they may be punished and receive less money or nothing.
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, it seems to me that fostering
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to
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at an early age is wrong. The main duty of a
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is to study because without education, they cannot ensure a bright future. If they start working early without paying attention to their academic performance, they are more likely to get bad results.
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,
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are still vulnerable and not mature enough to join the workforce where there are a number of rules, competitions and stress which can have a detrimental effect on both physical and mental development of a
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. In conclusion, people have different points of view about whether
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should be encouraged to
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and get paid or not; and personally, I think that they should only focus on their studies because they are still immature and education is immensely important to a person.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Child labor
  • Exploitation
  • Minimum age
  • Work experience
  • Survival
  • Taking responsibility
  • Education
  • Poverty
  • Legal restrictions
  • Physical toll
  • Psychological impact
  • Cultural perceptions
  • International conventions
  • Economic impact
  • Work-study programs
  • Skilled labor
  • Unskilled labor
  • Developing economies
  • Moral implications
  • Professional development
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