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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays with an increase in world population environmental issues are becoming
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 of the most important
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 of our planet. it is believed that the extinction of some types of fauna and flora is a major challenge while some
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 think that we have other important issues. On the
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 hand, the carbon footprints of
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 are causing most ecological
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 and to preserve nature we must take action as we can. Loss of habitat of some animals and plants are
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 of the biggest concerns because they support balance in native wildlife. All the living organisms, including human beings, are connected,
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 the disappearance of species leads to loss of biodiversity.
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 often make mistakes without thinking about the consequences, they kill animals for their fur or horns, cut down or burn forests that are considered home for other animals.
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 the other hand, there are other serious challenges like global warming effects on
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ocal population.
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 of global warming caused by greenhouse gases, the average temperature on Earth is being raised
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every year. Melting glaciers, flooding,increasing sea levels are all the consequences of the greenhouse effect concerning us.
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, due to air pollution, new diseases of
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reathing system have appeared and
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 are facing health
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. So these are
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 issues that need to be solved soon. To sum up, I believe all the ecological
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 are important, as nature is a vital part of our lives. Wildlife preservation requires us to safeguard the environment,
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 we have to pay more attention to conserving our planet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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