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Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#person #life #luck
Destiny and good fortune are believed by some people. These play an enormous role in our
life
 whilst others have contrast viewpoint.
Although
 some are born with good talents and skills which are suitable for achieving certain goals, I believe without hard work these are wasted.
Firstly
, hard work is the only key to success. If people goal high to achieve something in
life
, they need to put efforts.
Right
actions
 will lead to the achievement of desired objectives. These
actions
 should be continued until the final destination of success is reached.
For instance
, the best cricketers in the world, practise daily. Some may are born with sports skills but to be best sportsmen it is mandatory to stay fit and practise.
Hence
, the
right
actions
 and hard work will eventually lead to success in
life
.
Secondly
, correct guidance
also
 plays a huge role. Mentors' lessons are the key factors.
Right
 action in the
right
 direction is a must which is suggested by teachers. Learners can practise but the
right
 technique is taught by someone who is already instilled with the required skills.
For instance
, Yuvraj Singh is a master in cricket because his father Yograj Singh taught him the best methods. An efficient teacher can create the best professionals irrespective of their inherited talents.
Hence
, tutors help to achieve aims in
life
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not luck. ` In conclusion, destiny has little impact;
nevertheless
, efforts and guidance are indispensable to be successful in
life
. In my perspective, luck is less likely to impact endeavour;
however
, correct
actions
 and regular feedback is must to be successful in
life
.
Submitted by Priya on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • luck
  • determination
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • skills
  • continuous learning
  • achievements
  • opportunities
  • networking
  • personal accountability
  • diverse backgrounds
  • access to resources
  • causality
  • creative industries
  • structured fields
  • linear
  • predicated on merit
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