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You have seen an advertisement for a community college that needs teachers for night classes. Write a letter to the community college. In your letter: say which advertisement you are answering describe which course(s) you want to teach, and what it/they would be about explain why you would be a suitable teacher

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Dear Sir/Madam, I have seen one advertisement in the new paper for the requirement of
teacher
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a teacher
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 for night classes.
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, I am talking about the one in which we have to teach and steer adolescents. It was mentioned in the
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 that the community college is looking for
the
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a
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computer
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 teacher to teach
basics
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the basics
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 of how to operate the
computer
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. I believe that nowadays, technical knowledge about
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computer
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 is very imperative and children should know about it.
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, it will help them in future as well. I have completed my graduation in
Computer
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 Technology. And I
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 have 5 years of teaching experience at ITI community college. I am working in an IT firm and my office timings are from 9 am to 4 pm. So for
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 night shift will be more relevant. I look forward to receiving your reply. Yours Sincerely, Akshay Shrivastava

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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