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What should goverment do for a country to become successful?

#goverment #country
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These days, there are many poor countries which stuck in
develpoment
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development
.So what the
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goverment
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government
 should actually do for their
country
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 to achieve a feat? In my opinion,
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there
that
 are a lot of ways which can improve that
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situation
 for many reasons which will be discussed in
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Firstly
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,
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government
 should provide residents with some basic needs
such
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 as food, medical care and education, because it is only
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governments
 responsibility to look after their citizens. By providing professional schooling people will become more literate and in
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esult that will help to boost
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conomy in some way.
Moreover
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,
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government
 should give more working places.
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, nowadays many people go abroad in order to find
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etter job and life due to the lack of places for employment. By doing so,
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government
 can encourage residents to stay in their
country
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 to support the development of the
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.
Secondly
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,
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government
 can ask for financial help in rich countries.They should provide
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omeland with new technology so that that
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 will develop in
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ifferent and modern way that will help to become more independent.
For example
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, Ukraine
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received
 help for Canada and grew economically by the end of 2021. Canada
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 them with military equipment because Ukraine has
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 with Russia.
In addition
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,
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 helped financially and in result
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 rebuilt a lot of broken roads, spent money to enhance the level of education and provide citizens with basic needs. In conclusion, I believe that
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government
 can
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take
 some steps to
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tackle
 their
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problems
problem
 and develop their
country
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 to become successful and independent in the future.
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