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Some people think that it is a waste of time for school students to study nature. To What extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Many people do think that studying about
nature
 is not essential, one can omit
nature
study
 during their
school
 life. I am totally disagreeing with the statement. I would say it is key for
students
 taking knowledge about
nature
 and implement it into science and technology.
Nature
 is
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ore part of humans’ life.
Nature
 gives us land to live and environment to breathe. Basically,
Nature
 is everything for
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uman being. It is very important for schools to conduct
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conventional and live programs to emphasis the essence of
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nvironment.
Students
 dropping
nature
 lessons led them
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risking the life of humankind. For
an
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example, it is s principle duty for a
school
 to teach
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tudent about attributes of plastics as well as the cons of it on
nature
. A
school
 in
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eighbourhood of Surat city started
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ampaign about not to use plastics within
school
 premises and it has drastically reduced the plastic scrap. I would say that power of education about
nature
 can generate
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istinctive effect on
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urroundings.
Students
 can take as a career and earn money based on the
study
 they have done on
nature
. Nowadays, there
are
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 distinctive job opportunity in the market regarding environment preservation and research on it. One can start a business of making biodegradable products. For
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example, A billionaire Elon Musk had a dream to do something for
nature
 in childhood. After the
study
 and research on
nature
 gave him
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onfidence to built electric cars which are much
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less harmful than
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gasoline cars.
This
 example clearly narrates that
students
 can establish their career if they have thought regarding
nature
 conservation roaming around in the brain. In conclusion, studying
nature
 during
school
 days strengthen the student's persona. It is never called
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 waster of time. An ideal student is one who
learn
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 all the subjects thoroughly and
make
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 mother
nature
 a better place. Some people think that it is a waste of time for
school
students
 to
study
nature
. To What extent do you agree or disagree with
this
 statement?
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