My name is Alex and I am a software developer in the Ericsson privated limited. I am writing this letter to seek your attention towards the decision of the firm to shutdown the cafeteria.

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My name is Alex and I am a software developer in the Ericsson

privated

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private

limited. I am writing

this

letter to seek your attention towards the decision of the firm to

shutdown

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the

cafeteria

First

of all, I would like to inform you about the reasons

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low

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the low

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usage of

cafeteria

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the cafeteria

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by the employees. Most of the workers do not try

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this

cafe because of its

low quality

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food and

baverages

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beverages

. Apart from

this

, there are very few options on the menu which often encourages the employees to not visit

this

cafeteria

. Due to above said reasons, employees prefer to go nearby restaurants and eating points which waste their plenty of time during the breaks. Not only

this

, due to unavailability of tea and coffee, sometimes, makes the staff less active.

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can adversely affect the production of the company. I would like to share some

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in order to improve

this

cafeteria

Company

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should inspect regularly the quality of raw materials used in the

cafeteria

so that it can be improved.

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contract

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the

cafeteria

ought to be given through proper advertisement of tender with specified menu items.

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can increase the competition and ,

thus

, can eventually raise the standard of the contractor. I shall be thankful to you if these issues will be raised in

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meeting. Yours sincerely Alex Mathew

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My name is Alex and I am a software developer in the Ericsson privated limited. I am writing this letter to seek your attention towards the decision of the firm to shutdown the cafeteria.

The Greeting

In many countries, people decide to have children at a later age than in the past. Why? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays many people choose to be self employed rather than work for a company or organisation. Why is this the case ? What are the disadvantages?

Schools should use films, computers and games instead of books. To what extand do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

some university students want to learn about other subjects, discuss both the view that is important and the view that studying for a qualification should be the priority