My name is Alex and I am a software developer in the Ericsson privated limited. I am writing this letter to seek your attention towards the decision of the firm to shutdown the cafeteria.

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My name is Alex and I am a software developer in the Ericsson

privated

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private

limited. I am writing

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letter to seek your attention towards the decision of the firm to

shutdown

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the

cafeteria

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of all, I would like to inform you about the reasons

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low

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the low

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usage of

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cafeteria

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the cafeteria

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by the employees. Most of the workers do not try

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apply

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cafe because of its

low quality

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food and

baverages

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beverages

. Apart from

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, there are very few options on the menu which often encourages the employees to not visit

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cafeteria

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. Due to above said reasons, employees prefer to go nearby restaurants and eating points which waste their plenty of time during the breaks. Not only

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, due to unavailability of tea and coffee, sometimes, makes the staff less active.

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can adversely affect the production of the company. I would like to share some

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in order to improve

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cafeteria

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Company

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should inspect regularly the quality of raw materials used in the

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so that it can be improved.

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contract

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the

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ought to be given through proper advertisement of tender with specified menu items.

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can increase the competition and ,

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, can eventually raise the standard of the contractor. I shall be thankful to you if these issues will be raised in

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meeting. Yours sincerely Alex Mathew

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The Greeting

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Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

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Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

227 words

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My name is Alex and I am a software developer in the Ericsson privated limited. I am writing this letter to seek your attention towards the decision of the firm to shutdown the cafeteria.

The Greeting

The picture below shows Bell Hill farm in 1976 and the changes that took place in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation discuss both views and give your own opinion.

n some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

When people live in a foreign country, they should follow local traditions and customs. Do you agree or not?