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You live close to a restaurant and have recently been disturbed by the noise coming from the restaurant in the evenings. Write a letter to owner of the restaurant. In your letter. 1. explain why you find the noise disturbing 2. suggest a way to solve the problem, 3. explain what you will do If the problem is not solved.

Dear
sir
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Sir
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 or Madam, I am Rupinder Kaur, who lives next to your restaurant. I am writing to formally make a
complain
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complaint
 about the restaurant
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 is related to the noise level coming from the store in the evenings. You have started to organise a DJ party for the customers until midnight. You play music at a very high volume, and people sometimes scream a lot
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 singing the songs. The sound is leaking out into my area
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 inadequate soundproofing of the venue. I would appreciate it if you could either implement proper soundproofing measures or lower the music's volume.
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, I suggest the
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management can encourage customers to keep vocal noise to a minimum, thereby avoiding the disturbances in
neighborhood
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the neighbourhood
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. I hope we can resolve
this
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 matter mutually.
However
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, please understand that if you do not solve my problem, I will have no choice other than to contact the city council regarding the issues to ensure local noise by-laws are being followed. I am looking forward to your positive consideration. Yours faithfully, Rupinder Kaur.

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add one more clear detail about how the noise affects your evening or sleep.
task response
Task response: Keep the tone formal all the way. Write 'make a complaint' not 'make a complain'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow. To make it better, link ideas with simple words like 'because', 'so', and 'therefore'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some lines can be shorter and more direct. This will make your main point stand out more clearly.
task response
Task response: You cover the reason for the noise, a way to fix it, and what you will do next.
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Task response: The tone is mostly polite and fits a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has one main idea, so the message is easy to understand.
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