some people say that protecting the environment is the government's responsibility. others believe that every individual should tae responsibility of it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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discuss both the views and side with the former view. On the one hand, deforestation and industrial revolution are

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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4 paragraphs

205 words

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