Some people think that family has the most important influence on children’s development, while others believe that factors such as TV, friends, music and books have a more significant impact. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The development of a child is affected by a number of influences like
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family, television, companion or even books. Some people argue that the impact of
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amily is more significant on them rather than TV, friends, music or books. While, some believe
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nfluence of songs, books and colleague is more. I agree with those who feel that
parents
and relatives have far more impact on the development of children. It is thought that kids get more effected with their acquaintances as they spend most of their time with them, whether at school or while playing. So, they tend to share their thoughts more casually and freely. But in
this
age children
also
try to imitate and even compete with their colleagues, which sometimes moulds a child in a positive manner.
However
, in many cases the repercussions are negative.
For example
, many youngsters start smoking at an early age just because of their classmate or watching it on television.
Therefore
,
this
can prove to be disastrous at the developmental stage of a teen.
On the other hand
, I strongly believe that the dominance of family is more. The reason is, a youngster starts to learn and understand the difference between good and bad at their home
first
.
Parents
especially teach them the fundamentals of life and how to become a good citizen. I feel it begins when the
parents
make them understand how to say 'thank you' and how to apologise. For illustration, unless the family grooms them to behave with others, it is impossible to get affected by any other factor.
Hence
, I hold the opinion that the significance of family is far more superior. In conclusion,
although
, friends and TV have some impact on the growing stage of a child, I think that because
parents
are their
first
teacher they are more influential.
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