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THE NUMBER OF PEOPLE WHO ARE AT RISK OF SERIOUS HEALTH PROBLEMS DUE TO BEING OVERWEIGHT IS INCREASING. WHAT IS THE REASON FOR GROWTH IN OVER WEIGHT PEOPLE IN SOCIETY . HOW CAN THIS PROBLEM BE SOLVED .

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These days, more people are getting obese. Those who are obese have a higher chance of having severe health challenges.
This
 essay will look at how poor eating habits and lack of
exercise
 has led to
this
increase
 and
also
 how the
this
 problem can be solved. The main reason for overweight is poor eating habit.
For example
, most people now eat junk meals
instead
 of home cooked meals.
This
 is because they are fast and easy to get. Eating of
such
 foods will only
increase
 the cholesterol and fat level in the body. One way of reducing the in-take of fast
food
 is for the government to
increase
 the tax on them, thereby making them more expensive and discouraging consumption.
In addition
, fast
food
 owners should always include: "high in-take of fast
food
 leads to obesity" in their sign post. Another cause of overweight is lack of adequate
exercise
. Most obese persons are either not exercising at all or do little.
This
 is usually due to their busy schedule or not having easy access to the gym.
Thus
, it will be difficult to burn off fats which could lead to severe heart condition. In order to solve
this
 problem, the government need to open more gyms and make them easily accessible to all.
This
 will enable persons to
exercise
 more and stay in shape. In summary, more individuals are being overweight because they eat the wrong type of
food
 and do not
exercise
 enough. The government need to
increase
 the tax on junk
food
 and open more gyms. If
this
 is done, I believe that the number of fat persons will reduce and we will have a healthier society.
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