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There are increasing number of people who does not know thier neighbours. What cause this situation and how to be solved ?

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With the passage of the
time
, there have been many changes occurred in way of living. In the past, the whole community is the part of the family but now the situation is totally opposite whereas, now
people
 did not know the families who are living just
next
 to there door.
This
 essay will enlighten the major causes of
this
 situation as well as suggest some possible solutions to tackle
this
 problem.
Firstly
, the main reason for
this
 obstacle is migration. Nowadays, the majority of masses move to other countries to find better opportunities for occupation and education. In other countries,the main differences are in the culture and native language that creates a barrier to make connections with their neighbours.
secondly
, human psychology
also
 contributes.
For example
, some
people
 have an introvert personality that why they do not like to express their self in society.
Moreover
, technology makes human busier so they did not have
time
 to spend on social gatherings. Like,
people
 love spends
time
 in the virtual world rather than communicate in the real world. They are making friends online on social sites, doing chat and have a race to surge a number of their followers. Every problem has solutions but
people
 have to take some initial steps.
initially
, developed countries where are the number of the migrated population are raising here authorities have to make some orientation programs for newcomers to introduce the basic culture and social values for their convenience. Along with
this
, balanced life should be followed. so, here is the parents' responsibility to develop a habit in children to make friends and attend social gatherings and devote some of their free
time
 in charity work so, they can learn the social skills. To epilogue,
although
 there are numerous causes those arise that circumstances but some of the changes in lifestyle contribute to making healthy relationships in the neighbourhood.
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