Throughout history, people have dreamed of living in a perfect society, but they have not agreed on what an ideal society would be like. What do you think is the most important element of a perfect society in this modern world? How can people work towards achieving an ideal society?

From the beginning of time, man has continued to strive for better standards of living, sort of a utopia. We did not quite know the intricacies of what we wanted, we knew that it could be better. Owing to
this
, year in year out, we come up with policies, explore the depths of science and technology and various other things we can imagine just so we can have the society we dream of.
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essay will discuss
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journey to the pot of gold at the end of the rainbow that we are on as humans and
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how we can get to it. I will begin by saying that in more recent times, we have been able to articulate a wide range of things we want to see in
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modern world. We have realized that due to the dynamics of the world, change is the only constant thing. For
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reason, I believe that the most important element of a perfect society is
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evelopment that cuts across all sectors. Our lawmakers think so too and
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is illustrated in the advent of the sustainable development goals. The SDGs are a compilation of 17 global ideals that governments all over the world are committed to achieving. Examples of these are quality education for all, gender equality, climate action, peace and a few others.
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ommitment from many, plenty
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countries still fall short.
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, in Africa, particularly Nigeria where
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come from, there is still a long way to go in terms of commitment. I believe that in order for us to attain these set goals, there has to be more awareness.
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results in a better understanding of where we want to be and enables us
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esign specific targets and methods to get there.
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, to conclude, I think that an ideal society is one where many issues are tended to.
This
is summarized in the word "development". We can work towards it by committing to the attainment of the global goals. For
this
to happen, all hands have to be on deck, across all levels of people and we will be on our way to utopia.
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