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Science will soon people line upt to 100 or even 200 years. Some belive this is a good thing. While other disagree. Discuss both views and give an opinion

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Everyone has a desire to live long a segment of society believes that it is a good other
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 disagree with
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 modern era scientists are trying to discover and invent new technology which can help to
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 live longer if a Scientist gets access on it it can affect on animal extinct because scientists are testing
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 on animals it
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 increases
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 increase the Population on earth increasing population will create lack of housing problems and
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 create food shortage if old
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 alive than they can dominate freshers everybody parts have their own process timing it is against the nature with
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 Technology they can alive great person
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 as Chandrashekhara Raman and Lenin because they have died at their young age if they alive individuals can learn many things from their experiences.
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,it really works in progress of the Nations because
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 come from different places to purchase and
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 for work it can increase the Economy of the country exemplify, the USA take to $28,000 to preserve dead bodies it is expensive it helps to boost country economy longer life expectancy creates more valuable work for a Society which it is clearly benefits. In conclusion ,
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 technology creates lots of disadvantages with some benefits it really helps to improve the Country economy but
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ncreased population in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • overpopulation
  • natural resources
  • environmental degradation
  • accumulated experience
  • ethical implications
  • social divisions
  • longevity
  • familial relationships
  • financial burden
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