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It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. To what extent should people try to have a good work-life balance? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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When we study the biographies of highly successful
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 thing that strikes us is the fact that they devoted their entire
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 to their cause. They cared for nothing else. It was
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 devotion that helped them leave a mark behind.
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 does not mean that
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 is not required. Neither does it mean that just because someone spends their entire
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 in the workplace, they will be as famous or successful as Mohandas Gandhi, Albert Einstein or Steve Jobs.
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 like Gandhi or Martin Luther King had just
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 mission in their
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. They believed in a cause and were ready to lay their
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balance
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work
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 with the sole objective of making a living. They are not exactly concerned about leaving indelible footprints behind. They only want a secure source of income.
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 is important for them. In fact, if they don’t get adequate leisure time and family time, they will wilt under the
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 pressure. Another thing to consider is job satisfaction. Many
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 do not like their jobs
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 yet they go to
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 every day because they want to put food on the table. They want to send their children to school and pay bills. They want a home and perhaps they
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 want a car. Actually, the only reason for them to
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 is to earn money to lead a comfortable
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. And comfort can only come from having adequate time for oneself and all the other things that
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 enjoys. In conclusion, the truly motivated are the ones who actually make a difference to the world and for
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 and the same.
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, they do not seek any
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balance
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;
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, the vast majority of employees do not belong to that category of
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 with the sole objective of earning money so that they can enjoy
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 is absolutely essential for them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Well-being
  • Productivity
  • Fulfilling
  • Time management
  • Prioritize
  • Burnout
  • Boundaries
  • Dedication
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Efficiency
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