In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customer travels to large shopping centre and mall to do shopping. Is it a positive or negative development?

Shopping is a popular activity nowadays ,

thus

some people prefer to visit malls and big shopping

centres

, but sadly for the local shops they have to close as the interest for

such

places is considerably decreasing . I believe that

this

is a negative development and I will present reasons to support my opinion in

this

essay .

To begin

with , admittedly large shopping places offer a variety of choices in different areas

such

as clothing or electronics , but their prices are

also

higher comparing to the smaller places . The overpricing is a reflection of the area where the mall is placed , as well as the number of staff required on the floor to provide service for the customers . To take into consideration is

also

the fact that majority of the retail

centres

are placed mostly in the town

centres

where is a challenge to find parking space ,

therefore

the cost of the parking ticket is another factor to be added to the final bill .

However

, individuals are taking

this

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trips sometime just as a relaxing activity and enjoyment of the extended selection available to be purchased . To continue ,

although

the local shops are not attractive from the variety point of view , they are useful for the people who are not able to travel .

Therefore

, their closure would

direcly

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directly

affect them .

Moreover

,

this

development is negatively impacting the financial status of the country , since more business

are

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forced to close . There would be fewer taxpayers contributing towards the national improvement .

Furthermore

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the unemployment rate would rise because of the low jobs available in the area . The disadvantages of the small businesses closing down would sadly impact the

locals

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lives . In conclusion ,

although

the shopping

centres

are attracting citizens by their variation of goods , I consider that the development has a negative impact

for

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the local

busineses

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businesses

business

.