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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customer travels to large shopping centre and mall to do shopping. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Shopping is a popular activity nowadays ,
thus
 some people prefer to visit malls and big shopping
centres
 , but sadly for the local shops they have to close as the interest for
such
 places is considerably decreasing . I believe that
this
 is a negative development and I will present reasons to support my opinion in
this
 essay .
To begin
 with , admittedly large shopping places offer a variety of choices in different areas
such
 as clothing or electronics , but their prices are
also
 higher comparing to the smaller places . The overpricing is a reflection of the area where the mall is placed , as well as the number of staff required on the floor to provide service for the customers . To take into consideration is
also
 the fact that majority of the retail
centres
 are placed mostly in the town
centres
 where is a challenge to find parking space ,
therefore
 the cost of the parking ticket is another factor to be added to the final bill .
However
 , individuals are taking
this
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 trips sometime just as a relaxing activity and enjoyment of the extended selection available to be purchased . To continue ,
although
 the local shops are not attractive from the variety point of view , they are useful for the people who are not able to travel .
Therefore
 , their closure would
direcly
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directly
 affect them .
Moreover
 ,
this
 development is negatively impacting the financial status of the country , since more business
are
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 forced to close . There would be fewer taxpayers contributing towards the national improvement .
Furthermore
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the unemployment rate would rise because of the low jobs available in the area . The disadvantages of the small businesses closing down would sadly impact the
locals
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local's
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 lives . In conclusion ,
although
 the shopping
centres
 are attracting citizens by their variation of goods , I consider that the development has a negative impact
for
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 the local
busineses
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businesses
business
 .
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