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Some people believe that restoration of old buildings costs too much; we should demolish them and build new ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there is a trending argument in the society that we should destroy old
buildings
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 and build a new one
instead
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. Because the renovation of old
buildings
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 is costly. I am not inclined towards the aforementioned statement.
This
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Firstly
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, restoration of the
buildings
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 is important as it showcases the history of that particular place.
Moreover
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, it somehow becomes the identity of the city.
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, there is a city name "Agra" in India where Taj Mahal was built. Today whole world knows about the Taj Mahal and they identify Arga city with
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 relic.
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,
people
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 love to visit these types of old
buildings
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.
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,
people
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 love to see the old construction.
As a result
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, the countries having old architecture generate good revenue from
tourism
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.
For example
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, a
country
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 like Rome generated 57.5 million in revenue from
tourism
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 because
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ommunity from different parts of the world love to travel to Rome to see the ancient
buildings
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. On the one hand, in my
country
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,
people
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 are attached to some historic
buildings
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.
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, there are few places where
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 and worship as well. By demolishing these building the sentiments of
people
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 will be hurt which can be detrimental for the
country
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.
For instance
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, in Jaipur,there was an ancient building named "Amar Ghar". Authorities were planning to destroy the building so to make new commercial complex. Due to which
people
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 started riots to oppose the decision. To conclude,
this
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 essay has given my viewpoints and reasons as well. I believe we should not demolish artefacts because it showcases the history. And the government should invest some amount to maintain these
buildings
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 as a
country
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 can earn a good amount of revenue from
tourism
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.
In addition
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, these relics play an important role in the
tourism
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 sector.
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