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Some people think that schools should teach pupils according to their academic abilities , while others believe that it is better to have pupils with different abilities study together . Discuss both the views and give your own opinion .

#people #schools #pupils #abilities #study
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rocess of life, but it is life itself. Every
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 are not
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ame in their academic curriculum sometimes
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 hard to teach them in
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ame class.
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, some people think that classrooms should be separate for scholar
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others think that it would be more beneficial to teach them in
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ame class. I
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 shall discuss both the views before forming an opinion. On the one side, children
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 the things from their friends, intelligent
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 seriously.
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tudent as per their level, which is suitable for both the categories. Sometimes,
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eak
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 with studies, so they come under tension and get demotivated. But when they are separated, teachers can handle according to their level which gives
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ositive attitude to the
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In addition
, intelligent
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 maintain discipline in the class. One the other side, weak
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 studies.
On the contrary
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 group do not treat them well and
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 directly affect the attitude and psyche. One most important benefit is that
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student
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 motivated to study. Even intelligent
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 can help
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 in studies and bond can be strengthened. Teachers and school can
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ital role in
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 for
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