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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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The world's temperature has been increasing due to human-made things. The primary cause of
this
 is the over-consumption of vehicle use
that is
 based on fossil fuel and the most viable solution to
this
 problem is that the state should launch an awareness campaign that encourages
people
 to buy electric-based
vehicles
. The main cause of global warming is the overuse of fossil-fuel-based transportation system.
This
 is to say that car ownership has been increased all over the world in the past 4 decades, and that
cars
 are mostly run on fossil fuel and release CO2 in the environment that eventually traps the sun heat in the atmosphere.
As a result
, the weather all around the globe has changed in the
last
 few decades and especially tropical countries are facing many problems.
For example
, due to the change in weather almost two-hundred thousand
people
 died in south Asia from heatstroke in the
last
 8 years. The most appropriate solution to
this
 problem is that the state should launch an awareness campaign in the media and in schools about the benefits of using electric
cars
.
This
 is because metrologists have already warned us that in the few
next
 years many countries and cities,
such
 as Bangladesh, New York, will be under the sea if we have not changed our habit of using fossil fuel-based automobile. The government should encourage
people
 to use electric
vehicles
instead
 of the traditional automobile.
For instance
, Tesla has launched electrical
cars
 in the United States of America and more and more
people
 are interested in buying that automobile,
people
 in the other countries should
also
 be encouraged by their government to buy more electric-based
cars
. In conclusion, the primary reason of increasing temperature is the increased use of
vehicles
 that release CO2 gas in the environment,
however
, it can be easily tackled by launching more electric-based
vehicles
 all around the planet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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