Some people from poor and rural backgrounds are find it difficult to get a university education. Universities should make it easier for such groups to enrol. To what extent do you agree or disagree.?

It is irrefutable that,
education
not only the source for the development of the nation, but
also
help to build a healthy community. A certain segment of society, getting hindrance in the way of higher
education
due to poverty and belong to village
areas
.
Therefore
,
such
institutions should be made
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emphasis to give relaxation to get enrolled. So, before giving any opinion both side needs to be proper scrutiny.
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school of thought claims that
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to benefit the associations and for future survival, it should be compulsory to provide
education
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individuals from backward
areas
are unwillingly drop out their higher
education
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nxiety of financial background.
However
, they stake their life at
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, the actual time has been going to start for learning. Apart from these students of that area feel uncomfortable and insecure in urban
areas
for example
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epartment of 'Ministry of Labour' the reason came in front of all that economical and social background is the main cause of low literacy rate of skilled
education
.
Moreover
, to increase the ratio of well-qualified humanity, department of higher learning should take steps to increase footprints from
such
areas
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orrect way to establish.The person from
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ealthy organization should make a charity to give donations only for the cause of higher
education
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overnment should make laws to reserve quota for those candidates who willing to get tutions but for any reason
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they are unable to participate. To illustrate, a survey made by 'Oxford University' in a college they made a group in which decided to impart free studies and get overwhelmed response. In conclusion,
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education
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steps are still pending to implement the same.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Equal opportunity
  • Diversity
  • Underrepresented groups
  • Financial constraints
  • Scholarships
  • Quota systems
  • Preparatory courses
  • Outreach programs
  • Academic standards
  • Tokenism
  • Reverse discrimination
  • Impoverished
  • Rural areas
  • Enrollment policies
  • Non-profit organizations
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