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Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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It has been known for some time now that a move towards sources of
energy
 which are not carbon-based is urgently required to stop the effects of global warming. In my view, there are too few
governments
 who seem to be promoting the
use
 of other types of
energy
such
 as
wind
, wave, solar and nuclear sources of
energy
.
Governments
 at present are too reliant on
coil
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, oil and gas.
Although
 some
governments
 are doing research into the
use
 of alternative
energy
 sources, many are not.
Energy
 from the
wind
, the sea and the sun does not pollute the environment and is an everlasting source of
power
. Nuclear
power
 is clean, and
although
 it is not totally unproblematic, it would provide a large amount of
energy
 and dramatically improve the environment. Countries
such
 as France have made good
use
 of nuclear
power
. My feeling is that more
use
 could be made of
wind
power
. In some countries, there has been a reluctance to
use
wind
 turbines, even in areas which are not densely populated, as some people believe they are eyesores. Personally, I believe they are not only useful
,
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 but beautiful as well.
Governments
 should spend more time and effort promoting the benefits of
this
 source of
energy
 and trying to make the public understand the reason for
change
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. In conclusion, I believe that, if
governments
 forced everyone to have a
wind
 turbine and solar panels
on
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 the building they live in, made more
use
 of wave
power
 and built more nuclear
power
 stations,
then
 they would manage to avert the dangers that are seriously threatening the Earth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spearheading
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • transitioning
  • economic implications
  • government policies
  • research and development
  • national energy security
  • public-private sector collaboration
  • diversifying
  • environmental impact
  • clean energy
  • industry growth
  • dependence on imported fuels
  • alternative sources
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