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You have visited the hill station recently. You were disturbed to see the plight of the green forest.

Trees
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 are
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 important part of our environment. Landscape with
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 will be more beautiful than without them but
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 give us not only stunning scenery they
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 bring us a lot of benefits.
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 of all,
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 absorb CO2, removing and storing the carbon while releasing oxygen back into the air. It means that without
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 we cannot breathe fresh air.
Trees
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 help to stop
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global warming by the absorbing CO2.
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,
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 contribute to a rich healthy ecosystem. Animals, insects, birds, and fungi make their home in the
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 and make a diverse ecosystem.
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 balanced environment, in turn, contributes to the betterment of human beings.
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 produce their own food that we call fruits.
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trees
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 receive the rainwater and hold them in the land.
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 prevents clean water from flowing and getting wasted in drains. Along with it they
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 act as watersheds and hold the floodwaters for some time before slowly releasing them into the earth and atmosphere. So, they maintain the water base. The root system of the
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 is so well made by nature that it holds the soil underground from getting washed away during rain and floods
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 prevents landslides and soil erosion. In conclusion
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humanity should understand that
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 have a lot of importance in our lives, and it provides seamless service for the environment. People have somehow not protected them and perhaps
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 why as on today we are being affected by global warming, severe pollution and other ill effects of deforestation.
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 should be treated and nurtured nicely so that human beings can survive on
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 planet. We should encourage others to plant more and more
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.

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