Some people think that charity organizations should only offer help to people of their own country. But others believe that these organizations should give aid to people in great need wherever they live. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. You should write 180-220 words.

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In today’s era, the popularity of charity organizations has dramatically changed the way
manies
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many
viewpoint develop about them. While some layers of society do claim that these
corporaitions
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corporations
ought to offer help to those of their own
country
, others are convinced that charity institutions should lend a hand to those in desperate need regardless of where they live. Summing up different opinions, I take the view that donating does not depend on residents
country
and donation companies are responsible for giving aid for everyone in
this
world.
First
and foremost, even if my opinion falls somewhere in the middle, it is more closer to the latter, as all
humanbeings
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human beings
are citizens of one planet, Earth, on balance, segmentation by
country
is, definitely, not the positive trend. There are millions of factors which I would consider to substantiate my view.
First
of all, every
country
has their own rights to
recieve
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receive
assistance.
Secondly
, not only will assisting for other countries be beneficial for
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rganization as they will gain more privilege and popularity by solving global issues, which can offer them funding or investigation
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but
also
it can trigger to stopping some problems in a short time period.
For instance
, while Covid-19, caused by the novel strain of
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irus in patient-zero, was in the pick of its spreading in Kazakhstan,
country
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central Asia, in 2020, aid offered by China contributed to a lessening of virus’ spread.
Moreover
, after the Asian tsunami occurred in 2014, over 160 aid organisations and UN agencies from different points of
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orld began operations in Indonesia to provide shelter, food and schooling. These actions paved the way to a great treatment of those who had severe and acute respiratory problems.
Nonetheless
, the powerful opinions of those thinking differently should not be casually brushed aside and it is important not to ignore
this
fact, that they have some reasons to think so.
Firstly
, citizens pay tax to the government, which is, at some degree, used by charity organizations.
This
means that it will not be beneficial for these corporations to help other
country
’s citizens
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if they are not invested. Another reason stemming from
this
topic for which assisting for your
country
is the best option for
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many
is that they have privilege in controlling money they invest. From what has been discussed above, here should be drawn a conclusion, that the relative views about
this
topic are subjects of frequent debate.
However
, as we are all mankind of one Earth, everyone has rights to receive money or other types of help no matter where they live.
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